Teh Wozzinator

cartoon network...interesting choice. lol.

lol...*sigh* i haven't had time to read that either

i guess i've commented on this before on nano...but this is pretty good. i've read it a few times...

hey aet...can you send the entire gorath you've written to me on nanomail or yws messages sometime? these are kind of hard to keep up with here in the forums...

oh, i just remembered the sherlock holmes it's set in some period of time around our own, right??

haha, THAT was funny...stupid tho... i don't think the kid would get a good grade for that anyways, even if it wasn't plagiarizing. lol!

well, i didn't like this one as much...mainly cuz of the language...um...yeah...you could edit plenty of that out and make this a lot better

really good, altho it's a bit confusing. i like this part better than the first...lol

the only problem i really noticed right now is that you switch being present and past tense a bit. interesting story, i'll read more

wow, as with your last poem I read (the rose poem), it's really good. very smoothly written and meaningful

You need to space between paragraphs, including dialogue. As soon as you do that, I will crit :D k, i did it!

You need to space between paragraphs, including dialogue. As soon as you do that, I will crit :D sorry, it has three spaces before each new paragraph on word, and ...

not bad...a bit confusing, but good message

very good. you put the rhymes together really well, and it's a fun poem that has good meaning. (and i'm not a huge fan of poetry! :D )

wow, i don't usually like poetry (it seems like a poem, even if it doesnt rhyme. is it??) much, but this is really good work. nothing needs editing. i pretty ...